I tested the piece in a language analyser. Here's what emerges:
1) Average sentence length is slightly shorter (less rambling).
2) Words over 5 letters are 5% more frequent than the control piece.
3) Hard words(as defined) increase from 4% to 10%.
4) Lexical density decreases notably, making the piece easier to read.
5) The Fog index also shows improvement.
In short it's a better written, more sophisticated piece than your usual rubbish. And it contains no significant grammatical errors which normally abound in even your short pieces. I notice you have fixed your atrocious spelling though....spell check?
Admit it Dave....it's not original.


